Ooh, I like so far, very much! You have everyone perfectly, once again. I particularly like your landscape of the inside of Owen's head - all bullying and aggression and confrontation. (That man has one screwed up relationship with his dad - I am very sure of that. It's that constant fear of the "bigger boy", and the way he's projecting it like hell onto Jack: help me, now get out of my way, now leave me alone, now please help me. If Ianto steps up, I think Owen's wealth of daddy issues is going to fall at his door too.)
Couple of proofing comments is all: But there's one we're not. We're not stupid. One thing we're not, I think. And it's "Croydon", not "Croyden". (Take it from someone who lives an hour away. Also, hehehe to the Sarah Jane reference! I love that Owen says this, completely unaware that the Doctor's navigation isn't exactly all that.)
I wanna write Owen-meets-the-Doctor fic, on the basis that it'll never happen in the show. Did I mention Owen's daddy issues...?
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Date: 2007-02-12 09:55 pm (UTC)Couple of proofing comments is all: But there's one we're not. We're not stupid. One thing we're not, I think. And it's "Croydon", not "Croyden". (Take it from someone who lives an hour away. Also, hehehe to the Sarah Jane reference! I love that Owen says this, completely unaware that the Doctor's navigation isn't exactly all that.)
I wanna write Owen-meets-the-Doctor fic, on the basis that it'll never happen in the show. Did I mention Owen's daddy issues...?