ext_1115 ([identity profile] conjunkie.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] crabby_lioness 2006-11-09 08:23 pm (UTC)

I adored this really nicely written I do has one small con crit if thats okay?

and a senior member of the team found committing unpardonable offenses.

This line doesn't sit well with me, Ianto's not been on any missions (so far) I'm not sure I see him as a senior member, infact at this precise moment in time he doesn't feel like part of the team at all (to me) notice he's not involved in the Basketball game and isn't invited to the pub afterwards....

Just an observation but I look forward to more of this.

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